Original:
Sponsors as facilitators can have immense impacts on what identity an individual chooses. For example positive sponsors have a high chance in a student adopting a success identity. In Matthew Whalen’s literacy narrative he adopts a success identity due to a positive sponsor as facilitator. This can be observed when he meets his teachers Ms. Murray and Ms. Latinski. For example when Whalen states “Ms. Murray and Ms. Latinski helped me jump from common core classes to prep classes. This was a big milestone in my education.” (3). This shows that positive sponsors can have strong a strong influence on what identity a student adopts has a direct correlation with whether or not they have a positive of negative sponsor.
Revised:
Sponsors as facilitators can have immense impacts on what identity an individual chooses. For example positive sponsors have a high chance in a student adopting a success identity. In Matthew Whalen’s literacy narrative he adopts a success identity due to a positive sponsor as facilitator. This can be observed when he meets his teachers Ms. Murray and Ms. Latinski. Matthew met Ms. Murray and Ms. Latinski in high school and they were the only teacher in his life that properly facilitated his acquisition of literacy. They showed strong characteristics of being positive sponsors when they helped him study for tests and gave him strategies to help with his dyslexia. For example when Whalen states “Ms. Murray and Ms. Latinski helped me jump from common core classes to prep classes. This was a big milestone in my education.” (3). This shows that positive sponsors can have strong a strong influence on what identity a student adopts has a direct correlation with whether or not they have a positive of negative sponsor.
Original:
When a literacy sponsor facilitates resources for a student they must fully immerse themselves into the sponsorship discourse. In Lindsay Balch’s literacy narrative there are several sponsors present. However, only one of the sponsors in the story gave Lindsay the help she needed to succeed. The other two sponsors which were present did not properly facilitate the resources needed for Linday’s success. Lindsay states that “All I ever really did with them was read words on a notecard. On the occasion they would take out this huge binder filled with words on pages. They would test me on how fast I could read the words and read them correctly. The faster I read them the better of a reader I am apparently.” (3). This resulted in her having a poor relationship with reading while working with them. This shows that cultural influences such as sponsors can have negative impacts on one’s relationship with literature.
Revised:
When a literacy sponsor facilitates resources for a student they must fully immerse themselves into the sponsorship discourse. In Lindsay Balch’s literacy narrative there are several sponsors present. However, only one of the sponsors in the story gave Lindsay the help she needed to succeed. The other two sponsors which were present did not properly facilitate the resources needed for Linday’s success. Lindsay states that “All I ever really did with them was read words on a notecard. On the occasion they would take out this huge binder filled with words on pages. They would test me on how fast I could read the words and read them correctly. The faster I read them the better of a reader I am apparently.” (3). This resulted in her having a poor relationship with reading while working with them. The two poor sponsors showed a lack of passion which can easily transfer to a student, who whether they have knowledge of it or not holds ideological burdens which are transferred from sponsor to sponsored. This shows that cultural influences such as sponsors can have negative impacts on one’s relationship with literature.
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