Introduccion

In my first introduction I did not properly give context as to what I was discussing. It was confusing to the reader, and many of my peers felt I needed to ease into it. Because of this I gave better context and eased into my main idea. Additionally the paragraph was a bit disorganized so I adjusted the placement of several sentences. I edited my thesis slightly to make it more clear for the reader that I was discussing both the role of IMRaD format and Gee’s building tasks in a Discourse.

Evidence and Explanations

I added a few more quotes in order to support my claims. However, generally I built off of the claims which I already had, and had evidence for in order to expand my ideas. I expanded more on how the IMRaD format related to Gee’s building tasks, as well as, Haas’ text. I also more thoroughly explained the significance of using both Nair and Nair, and Gee’s concepts.

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